Poetry

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts) Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:32 PM Nov 2020

Here's one of mine; it's not a haiku.

I was lucky enough to have it published.

A Thick Gold Band--or The Taxi Driver

Rounded edges glowed
true
brown velvet was his hand and dark from Ethiopia
the gold ring
shone

The radio sang
music quick and fast
voices agile joyful rhythmic
was he homesick
had he been back

The gold band spoke of love
perhaps a wife a child
I didn’t ask

The gold ring shone.

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Here's one of mine; it's not a haiku. (Original Post) CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 OP

How beautiful! DeeDeeNY Nov 2020 #1

Thank you, my dear DeeDeeNY! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #3

Just lovely, Peggy Ohiogal Nov 2020 #2

Thank you so much, my dear Ohiogal! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #5

I can see why it was published. I understand that luck does play a role in whether or Atticus Nov 2020 #4

Thank you so much, my dear Atticus! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #7

So beautiful TEB Nov 2020 #6

Aw, thank you, my dear TEB. CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #8

Really paints a picture, Peggy lillypaddle Nov 2020 #9

Thanks so much, my dear lillypaddle! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #10

Old school. Good one. Words matter. cachukis Nov 2020 #11

Thank you, dear cachukis! I'm old, so that fits. CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #12

Gorgeous!!! Karadeniz Nov 2020 #13

Thanks so much! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #15

Now you're talking! Harker Nov 2020 #14

Thank you! CaliforniaPeggy Nov 2020 #16

You absolutely Star-Thrower Dec 2020 #17

I cannot access the poem in the issue where it appears, darn it. CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2020 #18

DeeDeeNY

(3,491 posts)

1. How beautiful!

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:34 PM

Nov 2020

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

3. Thank you, my dear DeeDeeNY!

Reply to DeeDeeNY (Reply #1)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:38 PM

Nov 2020

Ohiogal

(34,662 posts)

2. Just lovely, Peggy

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:37 PM

Nov 2020

You have put an interesting observation into beautiful words.

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

5. Thank you so much, my dear Ohiogal!

Reply to Ohiogal (Reply #2)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:39 PM

Nov 2020

This actually happened. I was coming home from a trip and this man was my cab driver. His wedding ring really caught my eye, with this result.

Atticus

(15,124 posts)

4. I can see why it was published. I understand that luck does play a role in whether or

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:39 PM

Nov 2020

not one's verses get published, but talent is required before one can hope for luck.

You have that.

Thanks for sharing your thoughtful prose.

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

7. Thank you so much, my dear Atticus!

Reply to Atticus (Reply #4)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:41 PM

Nov 2020

I have been very fortunate. And yes, luck does play a role! There are multitudes of small publishers all over the USA and many poets like myself competing to get in.

It has changed how I see the world.

TEB

(13,689 posts)

6. So beautiful

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:41 PM

Nov 2020

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

8. Aw, thank you, my dear TEB.

Reply to TEB (Reply #6)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:42 PM

Nov 2020

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

9. Really paints a picture, Peggy

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:46 PM

Nov 2020

Nice!

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

10. Thanks so much, my dear lillypaddle!

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #9)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 05:48 PM

Nov 2020

cachukis

(2,675 posts)

11. Old school. Good one. Words matter.

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 06:34 PM

Nov 2020

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

12. Thank you, dear cachukis! I'm old, so that fits.

Reply to cachukis (Reply #11)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 07:43 PM

Nov 2020

Karadeniz

(23,424 posts)

13. Gorgeous!!!

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 08:57 PM

Nov 2020

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

15. Thanks so much!

Reply to Karadeniz (Reply #13)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 10:59 PM

Nov 2020

Harker

(14,941 posts)

14. Now you're talking!

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 09:15 PM

Nov 2020

Thanks for sharing the ride.

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

16. Thank you!

Reply to Harker (Reply #14)

Mon Nov 23, 2020, 10:59 PM

Nov 2020

My pleasure.

Star-Thrower

(309 posts)

17. You absolutely

Reply to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 3, 2020, 07:07 PM

Dec 2020

nailed it. Do you have the link to the published poem? I'd love to read it. Thanks, great job.

CaliforniaPeggy

(152,099 posts)

18. I cannot access the poem in the issue where it appears, darn it.

Reply to Star-Thrower (Reply #17)

Thu Dec 3, 2020, 07:20 PM

Dec 2020

Below is the link for the Spring/Summer 2020 issue that it appears in. If you really want to see it, I guess you'll have to buy the issue. It's about $12 or $13 dollars.

Sorry! I tried and tried, but could not access it.

http://www.thestraybranch.org/now-available-2/

And thank you so much for your kind remarks!

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